高考作文讲评ppt

market has become flooded with new
profitability, wide-spread bike
companies in recent months. The bike- vandalism (破坏) and theft, and
sharing companies operate in a similar way.growing government regulation. A
• Although the service of the bikesharing is not well, it can bring some advantages. For example, it’s convenient for us...
• Notice: • 1.cover the main points. • 2.(1).现象 (2).好处 (3).问题 • 3.三个要点，5分，每点2分.
3.充实第二段：
• arguments to support your idea. • 要求：用约120个单词发表你的观
点，内容包括： • （1）支持成反对共享单车的推广； • （2）用2-3个理由或论据支撑你的
• Although the service of the bikesharing is notgwoeoldl, it can bring some advantages.
• you can find it easily and only pay for a little money.
• so, we should encourage people to ride Bbikicey-cslehsaring quite often than driving.
• As far as the promoting of the bikesharing is concerned, I think ...Fra Baidu bibliotek活用句 型) (吴雨欣)
• Above are my opinions.（倒装）(吴雨欣)
• I can’t be in more favor of it. （can’t...more句型）(胡慧月)
They use apps that allow users, after
Hong Kong man who was arrested
paying a deposit, to unlock the wheels with for throwing several shared bikes
their smartphones. After the journey, users into rivers said he had no regret
• However, there has been some problems appeared.
However,some problems exist.
5.Part of speech词性错误
• First,it is very ccoonnvveennieienncte for travelers to travel in the city.
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in a similar way. However,someone theft i象t
for which in好di处ca?tes personal information.
问题
要点重复，
• 3. With the development of
• This is one of the greatest invitations to traffic accidents.(高级词汇) (吕梦娟)
• Notice:
• They have achieved much in advanced phrases and sentence structures. We should learn from them.
1.审题：读出信息，进行概括。
现象
好处
问题
Bike-sharing has taken off in China far The promoting of the bike-sharing
faster than in any other market. The
service is also raising questions about
• but the bike-sharing service still exists some problem.
but some problems with bike-sharing service still exist.
2.Singular and plural单复数错误
• 1）单复数 • In China, many vehicles like bbuussesand
• Last but not least, when riding bikes, we will feel more relaxed after the whole day’s hard work.(省略句) (邓雪怡)
• Use bike-sharing, and you will find that it is useful.（祈使句+and+陈述句）(张子莹)
Weak points:
• 错误统计： 高二13
（41人）
错误类型 数量
搭配错误 50
单复数错误 35
单词拼写 31
动词运用 19
词性
14
句首大小写 14
1.Collocation搭配错误
• ...because bikes are almost distributed to everywhere.
• First ,with the developing of socieaty,there are more and more cars on the road.
•
4.Usage of verbs动词处理不当
• , the new service named bikesharing isapappepaerasred.
1).加强基础词汇和基本句子结构学习。 2).提高综合运用复合句的能力。 3).注意句子间的过渡和衔接。 4).仿写、背诵、熟读话题范文。
Comments on the writings
• Strong points:
• If so, we will build an environmentally friendly society.(省略句) (邢臻)
作文讲评
Teaching Aims
At the end of the class ,the students are supposed to
• 1.be more aware of mistakes made in their articles
• 2.know more about the right ways of writing
• However, it’s our duty to protect the environment which we rely on.(it作形式 主语，rely on高级词汇,复杂结构) (陶敏)
• It can also build social bonds between people.(高级词汇) (陈楚乔)
can leave bikes anywhere in public and pay destroying them because ”the GPS
a little money for the use. The service is devices in the bikes give away users'
• 3.be able to polish up their writings
Lead-in
1.What can be called a good article?
•【评分标准】内容完整，语言规范，语篇连 贯，词数适当。
•2.What are the difficulties you meet in writing articles?
• Riding bikes is a good way to keep healthy.
6.Capitalized letters大小写错误
• On the one hand, Iit is very convenient for us to use a bike-sharing.
• In conclusion, Tthhee promoting of the bike-sharing service is of beneficial to us.
very popular as it provides an effective personal information, such as their
solution to “the last kilometer” problem. locations.”
2.把握第一段:
• 比较哪个开头好
好处
• 1. Bike-sharing, claiming to be user- 现 friendly and affordable, has recently 象
• Notice:
• More attention must be paid to these mistakes in your daily English study.
task-based writing读写类作文
• 1.用约30个单词概述上述信息的主要内容； • 考查阅读及概括能力，以及语言组织能力。 • 2.用约120个单词发表你的观点，内容包括： • （1）支持成反对共享单车的推广； • （2）用2-3个理由或论据支撑你的观点。 • 考查分析问题、解决问题的能力，内容组织能力。
杂乱
technology, bike-sharing is turning
up. Because of it’s too short, there
are a lot of problems exists.
• Bike-sharing as a new way of traffic, turning up our life.
caught on throughout China. However,
lack of regulation gives birth to various
social problems, such as bike vandalism
and theft.
问题
•
2. Bike-sharing nowadays. The
• ....bicycle riding is the least expensive way of traveling apart from walking.(adj 最高级用于否定表达) (吕露露、程亚玮)
• We are supposed to achieve a balance between development and nature. （achieve a balance between...高级词汇） (陶敏)
cars pollute environment badly.
• What’s more, the destruction of bikesharing is a big problems.
2）Agreement主谓一致
• it seems that Bike-sharing gives away people’s information.
• What’s more, it bringsa big
convenience to people.
3.Spelling单词拼写错误
• we should help introducet the bikesharing to everyone.
• Besides, if city isccrroowwdeeddwith cars during rush hours, the citizen can use those bikes to their companies as soon as possible.