范文1 "Good Health"
1．身体健康的重要性。2．保持健康的途径。3．我自己的实践。
Good Health
The desire for good health is universal. In our competitive society it is important to maintain good health. On the one hand, people with good health can do work with full confidence and their progress in work in turn contributes to their health and happiness. On the other hand, a sick person is usually not interested in everything around him and therefore he loses many opportunities to become successful.
There are many ways to keep it. First, those who are always on the go from morning till night should find time to relax because too much stress will affect their health. Second, enough time should be left for sleep because that will help one become rested and refreshed. Finally, regular physical exercises benefit one's health a lot. So one should always keep in mind that a certain amount of exercise is not a waste of time.
As for me, I like playing tennis in the morning. I also attach much importance to enough sleep and relaxation. I believe this will ensure my good health for the rest of my life.
<评析> 这篇文章语句通顺，语言流畅，句式变化多样，用词面比较宽。就内容来说，则很切题，包括了提纲中的所有要点。第一段的第二句即主题句是从提纲发展而来的，第二段的首句，即主题句也是由提纲中的第二点发展而来。
范文2 Hope Project
Education plays a very important role in the modernization of our country. However, because of historical factors, there are still a lot of people in China who are undereducated, especially among youngsters in rural areas. They cannot afford the expenses of schooling and need help. At the same time, China is not able to invest too much money in the matter at present time. It is in this particular situation that the authorities carry out the "Hope Project ".
This project is necessary to our country. It is an urgent measure that the
government has taken. In the first place, this project will provide conditions for the youngsters to go back to school, which will contribute to their future success. Thus it will lead to the enhancement of the intelligence level in our country. Secondly, education makes it possible for people to acquire knowledge, which is useful to their future work. Hence, this Project benefits the modernization of our country a lot. Finally, it can make more people educated. Therefore, it may indirectly result in the increase of the living standards of our people.
In my opinion, this project is of great importance to our country at the present time. And it also will have a profound effect on the future achievements of our country.
I suggest that more work be done so that every child in the countryside can receive elementary education.
<评析> 次序词的使用不仅限于first, second, third，本文第二段使用了in the first place, secondly, finally列举原因，说明希望工程为什么对我国很必需，条理清晰，层次分明
范文3 Modernizing China
Modernization will bring a number of benefits to the people of China. Advancements in science and technology will result in better industrial and consumer products. New roads, trucks and trains will improve transportation for both people and goods. With new health care methods people will live happier and longer.
However, modernization also gives rise to a number of new problems. Pollution of the air, ground, and water has become a serious problem in many parts of China. An increase in vehicles on the roads has also resulted in more traffic accidents, injuries and deaths.
We can, however, deal with these problems if we are careful. We can train many environmental scientists who can help factories operate cleanly. We can pass new laws to regulate our traffic more safely. Finally, we must expand our education system to prepare better educated people for tomorrow.
<评析> 本文是段与段之间使用过渡句较好的例子。文章第一段说现代化给中国人民带来许多益处，第二段一开始就由however引出过渡句，指出现代化也同样带来新的问题。第三段段首的过渡句则用一个however巧妙地过渡到如何解决这些问题。过渡句的使用既表达了各段之间语义上的转折，又使文章各段衔接自然。范文4 Population Control
